Writing Task(May 23th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you think everybody should practice sports? Why or Why not?
People need the 30 minutes\' physical aerobic activities at least two times a week to sustain or improve their health condition.
So, we need to practice to move our body, sweating.
Learning sports at an early age is important. There\'s lots of sports. However, I think that it is important to learn the cooperation and team play at an early age. So the sports, like soccer, baseball or basketball is a good on for children to learn. They can learn what they have to do as a team member in their positions. And they can brainstorm to score, I mean they could cooperate with each other go get a common one goal.
강사 첨삭
People need the 30 minutes\' physical aerobic activities at least two times a week to sustain or improve their health condition.
>> Correct!
So, we need to practice to move our body, sweating.
So, we need to practice to move our body, sweating.
>> Correct!
Learning sports at an early age is important.
Learning sports at an early age is important.
>> Correct!
There\'s lots of sports.
>> Correct!
However, I think that it is important to learn the cooperation and team play at an early age.
>> Correct!
So the sports, like soccer, baseball or basketball is a good on for children to learn.
>> Correct!
They can learn what they have to do as a team member in their positions.
>> Correct!
And they can brainstorm to score, I mean they could cooperate with each other go get a common one goal.
>> Correct!
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