Writing Task: What helps you get to sleep?

2024-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Sonny

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i didn\'t need. the helps. beacause i\'m slept earlly. i\'m had so short sleeping time. i went to bd at 12:00 am, but i got. up at 6:00 am so i\'m slept only 6 hours but i\'m happy because i can do anything better differnt person. i\'ll study english, ciliming and work at the restrant (my job) everyday. i hope to i have my time for me.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ha[이름]! I am relieved that you don\'t have trouble sleeping. You deserve a longer \'me time\' and more sleep for working hard. Take care always!

-T. Sonny

i didn\'t need. the helps.
>>I don\'t need any help.
beacause i\'m slept earlly.
>>I sleep early.
i\'m had so short sleeping time.
>>But, I get insufficient sleep.
i went to bd at 12:00 am, but i got. up at 6:00 am
>>I go to bed at 12:00 am, then get up at 6:00 am.
so i\'m slept only 6 hours
>>So, I only sleep for 6 hours.
but i\'m happy because i can do anything better differnt person.
>>Nevertheless, I am happy because I can do better things like other people do.
i\'ll study english, ciliming and work at the restrant (my job) everyday.
>>I study English, do wall climbing and do my job at the restaurant I work for every day.
i hope to i have my time for me.
>>I hope I have more time for myself though.

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