Writing task: What\'s the worst problem you ever had and how did you solve it?

2020-07-16 · 첨삭 강사 Abigail

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My worst problem is that I have to married someone who is lovely and gentle. That\'s because I am a only child, so I really want to get my boy. Actually, my parents are very old, and I have to respond, and take care. And I think that I want to meet my real lover as well. In order to meet someone, I should lose a weight, and I\'ll join some club which is climbing. My real problem is that I have to find someone who married me. I\'ve have some thought that old age\'s woman haven\'t a baby. So, I really worried about that kind of things. So, I found some artificial insemination if I can\'t get baby.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jessica! Thank you for always participating actively during our classes.
-Teacher Abigail^^
Writing task: What\'s the worst problem you ever had and how did you solve it?

My worst problem is that I have to married someone who is lovely and gentle. 
>>My worst problem is that I have to marry someone who is lovely and gentle. 
That\'s because I am a only child, so I really want to get my boy. 
>>That\'s because I am the only child, so I really want to get a partner. 
Actually, my parents are very old, and I have to respond, and take care. 
>>Actually, my parents are very old, so I have to be responsible and take care of them.
And I think that I want to meet my real lover as well.
>>CORRECT!
In order to meet someone, I should lose a weight, and I\'ll join some club which is climbing. 
>>In order to meet someone I should lose some weight, and I\'ll join a climbing club.
My real problem is that I have to find someone who married me.
>>My real problem is that I have to find someone who will marry me.
I\'ve have some thought that old age\'s woman haven\'t a baby. 
>>I had some thought that old age women might have a hard time to have a baby.
So, I really worried about that kind of things. 
>>So, I\'m really worried about that thing.
So, I found some artificial insemination if I can\'t get baby.
>>So, I will go with the artificial insemination if I can\'t get a baby.

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