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I think ads from cometic company are exzagerated but these are not totally wrong. Many cosmetics have a component to protect skin from getting old. Efficiency of the cosmetic is prooved by many of Its costumer. Of course, If there is some fantasy of cometics but Many company have their own facility to investigate their product. That can make a better cosmetic which have special ability like a erasing wrinkles. In the past, Only do old ladies buy a cosmetics which contain a special ingredient to prevent to get age. However, In these days many people don't want to get old even men. We can find the fact that many entertainers who show from TV little get old. And most of them use popular cosmetic not to get old. But the most important thing is that these kinds of cometics are very expensive.

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