yes , I have GPS system

2014-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Of course, I have GPS systems. Navigation is one of them. Navigation is most useful thing in my life, when I want to go an unfamiliar place, It gives me alot of help. Once I enter the adress of place, it shows me the way. It is very convenient. and I have cellphone which contain GPS system. It also has Navigation but, It has more ability. When we want to search restaurant which is famous for its dish, It gives the way of it. Some ability can find their partner if they can't keep in touch. It is precautions to cheat with somebody. This can be weak point in other perspective. I think it makes us save money and time which are precious for us. It doesn't have many weak points. I cant think up even one weak point. I think it is revolutionary equipment in human history

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Wow! GPS is really helpful.

I think it will make our lives easier.

Thanks for sharing your ideas about it.

I hope that you are having a great day.
Teacher Nina


Of course, I have GPS systems. Navigation is one of them.

>> correct
Navigation is most useful thing in my life, when I want to go an unfamiliar place, It gives me alot of help.

>> Navigation is the most useful one for me. When I go to an unfamiliar place, it gives me a lot of help.
>> OR: Navigation is the most useful because when I go to new place, it really helps me a lot.

Once I enter the adress of place, it shows me the way.

>> correct (spelling check: address ^^) 
It is very convenient.

>> correct 

and I have cellphone which contain GPS system.

>> And I have a cellphone which contains a GPS system.
>> OR: I have a cellphone with GPS.

It also has Navigation but, It has more ability.

>> It also has a navigator but it has more features.
When we want to search restaurant which is famous for its dish, It gives the way of it.

>> When we want to search for a restaurant which serves a famous dish, it gives me the way to reach that place.

Some ability can find their partner if they can\'t keep in touch.

>> Some features can find their partner if they can\'t keep in touch.

>> OR: There is also a feature that it helps them find their partner if they can\'t communicate.

It is precautions to cheat with somebody.

>> It is a way to cheat somebody.
>> OR: The bad thing is that you will know if your partner cheats.

This can be weak point in other perspective.

>> This can be the weak point of it.

>> OR: This is the disadvantage of it.

I think it makes us save money and time which are precious for us.

>> correct

>> OR: I think it helps us save money and time which are precious for us.
It doesn\'t have many weak points.

>> It doesn\'t have a lot of disadvantages.

I cant think up even one weak point.

>> I can\'t even think of one.
I think it is revolutionary equipment in human history

>> I think it is a revolutionary equipment in human history.

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