Yes I'm happy
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good evening!
Thanks for sharing your ideas about happiness.
I am sure that you are always happy.
I admire you for always wanting to enhance your skills.
Yes, you can express yourself more now but there are still areas to work on.
We can do it together. Just be focused and don\'t ever be discouraged,
Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
I\'m happy because I have a job and Carolyn.
>> correct
These are essential for me to live my life.
>> correct
>> OR: These are essential for me for my life.
Most of the time actually, I can\'t realize that I\'m happy.
>> Most of the time, I can\'t think about why I am happy.
>> OR: Most of the time, I don\'t know the reason why I am happy.
but when I look back on my life, then I think I\'m happy.
>> But when I look back on my life, I realize that I\'m happy.
Happiness is dependant on what we think.
>> Happiness depends on what we think.
Even a foor might be happy, when he think he is happy.
>> Even a poor might be happy, when he thinks that he is happy.
So, that means there is some kind of standard for happy.
>> So, that means that there is a standard for being happy.
Of course, I have standards money and love.
>> Of course, I have standards and those are money and love.
Money is related with my job, and Love is related with Carolyn.
>> correct
In this perspective, Even single people can be happy because they might have their own standards in each of their mind.
>> In this perspective, even sing people can be happy because they might have their own standards that will make them happy.
If there is person who really love watch an animation, he can be happy
>> correct
and there is school boy who is not good at getting good score in a test but he can be happy while he is hanging around with his friend.
>> And there is a school boy who is not good at getting a good score in a test but he can be happy when he hangs out with his friends.
Hobby and friend ship can be also another standard for happiness.
>> correct (friendship is one word ^^)
Probably, Hapiness is in our mind, but we don\'t know where is it.
>> Probably, happiness in on our minds but we don\'t know it.
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