Yes, it is.

2023-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

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All right, happiness is a goal. But happiness is not the only goal. My goal is mix happiness and other things. I want to hope to my family\'s happiness, health, money and everything. I think happiness is come to me if i have it.

강사 첨삭

Hi Da [이름],

Everyone wants to be happy. However, we some of the time consider satisfaction a thing that happens to us — something we have no control over. It\'s simple to connect the concept of happiness to our current circumstance. \"If only things were different, then I would be happy,\" we might think to ourselves. How happy we are is largely determined by how we think, what we do, and how we live each day. We can use the key components of happiness to make ourselves happier by learning about them. Achieving small, specific goals can add up to big happiness!

~Teacher Cathy

 

All right, happiness is a goal.

>>I agree, happiness is an objective.

But happiness is not the only goal.

>>But happiness is not the only goal.

My goal is mix happiness and other things.

>>My goal is a mix of happiness and other things.

I want to hope to my family\'s happiness, health, money and everything.

>>I want to hope for my family’s happiness, health, money, and everything.

I think happiness is come to me if i have it.

>>I think happiness will come to me if I have it.

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