Yes! It\'s okay!
학생이 쓴 원문
The toys we used in the past were things we used when we were young, so these are no different from our history. In fact, when grandmothers and grandparents get dementia, doctors sometimes show them the items they used when they were younger. When you were a child, you practice showing things and slowly remembering them. Looking at old objects and toys like this, it will be a useful time to recall memories or to share stories with family once again.
강사 첨삭
Hello Maria!
This is a very well written output. It is true that things remind us of some good old memories. Sometimes keeping them always rewinds what we have experiences in the past. I hope you keep only good things with you.
I would like to thank you for sending me this composition. Well done!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
In fact, when grandmothers and grandparents get dementia, doctors sometimes show them the items they used when they were younger.
>> Correct!
When you were a child, you practice showing things and slowly remembering them.
>> Correct!
Looking at old objects and toys like this, it will be a useful time to recall memories or to share stories with family once again.
>> Correct!
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