Yes! Of course!!

2021-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

학생이 쓴 원문

Of course, I want to go to the moon, there are a lot of stars, also there is a beautiful milky way, so this is why I want to go to the moon. But you know, my dream is not a astronauts, my dream is deplomat. So mabye I can\'t go to the moon, and space, but I will protects a lot of astronauts. If I became a deplomat, I will be responsible for continuing to explore, investigate, develop and discover more about the universe. In conclusion, of course, I want to go to the moon, but instead of going, I will protect the astronauts so that the beautiful universe can continue.

강사 첨삭

Wow, Maria!

Very well said! I think this is a very good answer. I hope that you can fulfill all of the duties of a great true diplomat of the world and even on outer space!

Space travel is near, brace yourself.

Thanks for this composition, see you soon again.

-T. Donna =)

Of course, I want to go to the moon, there are a lot of stars, also there is a beautiful milky way, so this is why I want to go to the moon. 
>> Correct! 
Or: Milky Way

But you know, my dream is not a astronauts, my dream is deplomat. 
>> But you know, my dream is not to be an astronauts, my dream is to be a diplomat. 

So mabye I can\'t go to the moon, and space, but I will protects a lot of astronauts. 
>> So maybe I can\'t go to the moon and space but I will protect a lot of astronauts. 

If I became a deplomat, I will be responsible for continuing to explore, investigate, develop and discover more about the universe. 
>> If I became a diplomat, I will be responsible for continuing to explore, investigate, develop and discover more about the universe. 

In conclusion, of course, I want to go to the moon, but instead of going, I will protect the astronauts so that the beautiful universe can continue.
>> Correct!

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