you think violence is needed to discipline a child? Why or why not?
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you think violence is needed to discipline a child? Why or why not?
I don\'t need to discipline a child.
If I give a violence to a child, I think to be changed more emotioanl.
Violence has a bad effect s by parents and child.
For the discipline a child, we have to be a rational person
Of course, It might a difficult!!
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Hi [이름]! I think the Asian culture is used to using violence when it comes to disciplining their children but this has to end already. Violence is never the key. We should be very patient with children because they are bound to make mistakes as they are growing up. That\'s why I think good communication relationship is very important :) I agree with your answer.
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I don\'t need to discipline a child.
>> Violence is not needed to discipline a child.
If I give a violence to a child, I think to be changed more emotioanl.
>> If violence is given to a child, it would harm them emotionally.
Violence has a bad effect s by parents and child.
>> Violence will have a bad effect to both parents and to the child.
For the discipline a child, we have to be a rational person
>> To discipline a child, we have to be a rational person.
Of course, It might a difficult!!
>> Of course, it can be difficult at times.
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