You\'ve mentioned that your masterpiece is your daughter. Please describe your feelings when you fir

2021-09-28 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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I first met her on March 20, 2020. After 12 hours of labor, before seeing her, I first heard her cry. And the moment I saw her for the first time, I was surprised that it wasn\'t her face I thought it was. She resembles her mother-in-law very much. I could feel the power of genes. Anyway, the moment I saw the baby for the first time, I cried with so much gratitude. I suffered a lot during the 10 months of giving birth. My whole family was worried, and I was scared too. However, the baby was healthy, and the moment I saw her, I felt a sense of relief that it had been completed. My life before and after having a baby was completely different. The body is very hard, but the happiness is doubled. I wanted to have a daughter before I had a baby because I was lonely and struggling living in a foreign country. Indeed, God has given me a daughter as a gift. She is currently my best friend. She gives me a lot of laughter and comfort. Thanks!

강사 첨삭

Wow! It must be something extraordinary, Jane! I am glad to hear your story. May your daughter grow with love, goodness and fear of God!-Faith-
I first met her on March 20, 2020. 
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OR On March 20,2020 was the first time I laid my eyes on her.
After 12 hours of labor, before seeing her, I first heard her cry. 
>> CORRECT
And the moment I saw her for the first time, I was surprised that it wasn\'t her face I thought it was. 
>> And the moment I saw her for the first time, I was surprised that her face wasn\'t the one I thought.
She resembles her mother-in-law very much.
>> She resembles my mother-in-law very much.
I could feel the power of genes. 
>> I could feel the power of my husband\'s genes. 
Anyway, the moment I saw the baby for the first time, I cried with so much gratitude. 
>> Anyway, the moment I saw my baby for the first time, I cried with so much gratitude.
I suffered a lot during the 10 months of giving birth. 
>> I suffered a lot during the 10 months of conceiving her. 
My whole family was worried, and I was scared too. 
>>CORRECT
However, the baby was healthy, and the moment I saw her, I felt a sense of relief that it had been completed. 
>>CORRECT
My life before and after having a baby was completely different. 
>> CORRECT
OR My life before and after having a baby was antithetical
The body is very hard, but the happiness is doubled. 
>> The body has a hard time, but the happiness is doubled. 
I wanted to have a daughter before I had a baby because I was lonely and struggling living in a foreign country.
>> I really wanted to have a daughter before because I was lonely and struggling living in a foreign country.
Indeed, God has given me a daughter as a gift. 
>> CORRECT
She is currently my best friend. 
>> CORRECT
She gives me a lot of laughter and comfort.
>> CORRECT
Thanks!
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