"YOUNG PEOPLE WANT TO RETIRE BY AGE 60 BUT EXPERTS WARN THE 'NEW RETIREMENT AGE' IS 70"

2018-08-17 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Nowdays, most of people are getting longer life[이름]e. aren't they? So it shouldn't avoid to consider when the perfect [이름]ing is retirement. For me, it's difficult to say if anybody asks me this question Because I'm not sure about my finantial amount in the futher. But frankly, I'd like to retire earlier [이름]e if it's possible. Basically, life[이름]e is longer than past generation and it means that current generation is more healther. So according to the article, the new retirement age should be 70 years old. I agree expert's opinion. And we're able to get opportunities. I thinks it's could be benefits for our life.

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Nowdays, most of people are getting longer life[이름]e. aren\'t they?
>>
Nowadays, most people have longer life[이름]e. 
So it shouldn\'t avoid to consider when the perfect [이름]ing is retirement.
>> So, it can\'t be avoided to consider when is the right [이름]e for retirement.

For me, it\'s difficult to say if anybody asks me this question
>> For me, it\'s difficult to answer when someone asks this question.
Because I\'m not sure about my finantial amount in the futher.
>> Because I\'m not sure about my finances in the future.
But frankly, I\'d like to retire earlier [이름]e if it\'s possible.
>> But frankly, I\'d like to retire earlier if it\'s possible.
Basically, life[이름]e is longer than past generation and it means that current generation is more healther.
>> Basically, lifespan is longer than the past generation which means that the current generation is healthier.
So according to the article, the new retirement age should be 70 years old.

>> Correct

I agree expert\'s opinion.
>> I agree to this expert\'s opinion.
 And we\'re able to get opportunities. I thinks it\'s could be benefits for our life.

>> I think it could benefit our live.

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