"YOUNG PEOPLE WANT TO RETIRE BY AGE 60 BUT EXPERTS WARN THE 'NEW RETIREMENT AGE' IS 70"
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Nowdays, most of people are getting longer life[이름]e. aren\'t they?
>> Nowadays, most people have longer life[이름]e.
So it shouldn\'t avoid to consider when the perfect [이름]ing is retirement.
>> So, it can\'t be avoided to consider when is the right [이름]e for retirement.
For me, it\'s difficult to say if anybody asks me this question
>> For me, it\'s difficult to answer when someone asks this question.
Because I\'m not sure about my finantial amount in the futher.
>> Because I\'m not sure about my finances in the future.
But frankly, I\'d like to retire earlier [이름]e if it\'s possible.
>> But frankly, I\'d like to retire earlier if it\'s possible.
Basically, life[이름]e is longer than past generation and it means that current generation is more healther.
>> Basically, lifespan is longer than the past generation which means that the current generation is healthier.
So according to the article, the new retirement age should be 70 years old.
>> Correct
I agree expert\'s opinion.
>> I agree to this expert\'s opinion.
And we\'re able to get opportunities. I thinks it\'s could be benefits for our life.
>> I think it could benefit our live.
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