young student
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that semiconconductor industry is the important field to the government for economical development.
Also it is good prospect and competitive field in th future.
But I don\'t agree to train 16 years old young student as industrial workers .
Education must not use as a tool for country and special groups.
It is enough time to learn semiconductor skill after graduate high school.
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Good afternoon, Ms. [이름]!
I agree that education should focus on students\' overall development, not just preparing them for one industry.
I agree that education should focus on students\' overall development, not just preparing them for one industry.
Aki~
I think that semiconconductor industry is the important field to the government for economical development.
>>> I think the semiconductor industry is an important field for the government\'s economic development.
Also it is good prospect and competitive field in th future.
Also it is good prospect and competitive field in th future.
>>> It also has strong growth potential and is expected to remain competitive in the future
But I don\'t agree to train 16 years old young student as industrial workers .
But I don\'t agree to train 16 years old young student as industrial workers .
>>> But I don\'t agree with training 16-year-old students to become industrial workers.
Education must not use as a tool for country and special groups.
Education must not use as a tool for country and special groups.
>>> Education should not be used as a tool to serve the interests of the government or specific groups.
It is enough time to learn semiconductor skill after graduate high school.
It is enough time to learn semiconductor skill after graduate high school.
>>> There is plenty of time for students to learn semiconductor-related skills after they graduate from high school.
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