young student

2026-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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I think that semiconconductor industry is the important field to the government for economical development. Also it is good prospect and competitive field in th future. But I don\'t agree to train 16 years old young student as industrial workers . Education must not use as a tool for country and special groups. It is enough time to learn semiconductor skill after graduate high school.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Ms. [이름]!
I agree that education should focus on students\' overall development, not just preparing them for one industry.
Aki~

I think that semiconconductor industry is the important field to the government for economical development.
>>> I think the semiconductor industry is an important field for the government\'s economic development.

Also it is good prospect and competitive field in th future.
>>> It also has strong growth potential and is expected to remain competitive in the future

But I don\'t agree to train 16 years old young student as industrial workers .
>>> But I don\'t agree with training 16-year-old students to become industrial workers.

Education must not use as a tool for country and special groups.
>>> Education should not be used as a tool to serve the interests of the government or specific groups.

It is enough time to learn semiconductor skill after graduate high school.
>>> There is plenty of time for students to learn semiconductor-related skills after they graduate from high school.


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