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I wish to get a job. I wish I had followed my friend. I choose a dog instead of a cat. Today my younger sister return at home. She received practical training at a confectioner's shop in Seoul within a month. The confectioner's shop is famous in Korea. My sister major in foodstlylist. She learn various dishs. She most interested in bread, cookie and desert that's why. She practice cooking learn at the college at home. The day she practice I can eat delicious dishs.

Hi Lindsay! This is a good composition. I hope you get a job soon! Don't worry, you just need to show them what you got and be patient okay? Wow. I envy your sister. I really want to learn how to cook and bake pastries like in that drama Pasta. I'm sure you've seen that.  Well, here are my corrections for today. Check on them and see what you can improve. =T.Marie= I wish to get a job. >> correct^^I wish I had followed my friend. >> correct^^I choose a dog instead of a cat. >> I chose a dog instead of a cat.Today my younger sister return at home. >> Today, my younger sister returned home.She received practical training at a confectioner's shop in Seoul within a month. >> She received some practical training at a confectioner's shop in Seoul in one month.The confectioner's shop is famous in Korea. >> correct^^My sister major in foodstlylist. >> My sister's major is food stylingShe learn various dishs. >> She learned how to make various dishes.She most interested in bread, cookie and desert that's why. >> She was mostly interested in bread, cookies and dessert that's why (she took that major).She practice cooking learn at the college at home. >> She practiced cooking at the University dormitory.The day she practice I can eat delicious dishs. >> Everytime she practices, I can eat delicious dishes.