Your homework
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Well..I want to describe when I was young. You know I went to another country so I could see a lot of something there. So I want to talk about my best memory.
I got in the ocean and I gave the banana to many fish. And then a lot of fish ran to the banana so I was happy, I fell so happy, at that instant my mother took a picture for me.
강사 첨삭
1. Well..I want to describe when I was young.
>>Well, I want to describe my memorable moments when I was young.
2. You know I went to another country so I could see a lot of something there.
>>You know I went to another country so, I could see a lot of things there.
3. So I want to talk about my best memory.
>>So, I want to talk about my most memorable moments there.
4. I got in the ocean and I gave the banana to many fish.
>>I went to the ocean and I fed many fish with bananas.
5. And then a lot of fish ran to the banana so I was happy, I fell so happy, at that instant my mother took a picture for me.
>>And then, a lot of fish ran to the banana so I was happy, at that instant, my mother took a picture for me.
Good.
- T. Melody ^^
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