Your voice

2020-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: [ESSAY] Write about one cartoons or animation show/movie that you watch and talk about the lessons that children can learn from it. My favorite animation is . In that movie, the 16-year-old Nagisa believes in the spirit of the horse (Kotodama) that good words are hope and bad words are returned as anger. One day, angry when a friend Gaede said mean things on his way home from school, Nagisa accidentally finds a broken radio booth in an ownerless cafe called Aquamarine and confides her innermost thoughts there. Meanwhile, an anonymous informant who heard the story on the radio sent a letter to the narrator.. In that movie, I can learn \'We don\'t speak not good words.\'. I really liked that movie!

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름]!

Thanks for sending your homework today. I plan to look this film up on Google after my work. I\'ll let you know when I\'ve found it. See you in two days!

Cheers,
Jean~~


Theme: [ESSAY] Write about one cartoons or animation show/movie that you watch and talk about the lessons that children can learn from it.

My favorite animation is .
>> My favorite animation is Your Voice.

In that movie, the 16-year-old Nagisa believes in the spirit of the horse (Kotodama) that good words are hope and bad words are returned as anger.
>> correct~~

One day, angry when a friend Gaede said mean things on his way home from school, Nagisa accidentally finds a broken radio booth in an ownerless cafe called Aquamarine and confides her innermost thoughts there.
>> correct~~

Meanwhile, an anonymous informant who heard the story on the radio sent a letter to the narrator..
>> correct~~

In that movie, I can learn \'We don\'t speak not good words.\'.
>> In that movie, I can learn that we shouldn\'t say mean or bad things to others. 

I really liked that movie!
>> correct~~
>> or: I enjoyed this movie. 

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