YOUTH
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to recommend to young generation that you go to abroad to work or study.
Because our lifespan will get longer, we had better to try as many thing as possible.
Korea is geographically isolated from other countries.
So we don\'t have trial and will, it is easy that we stay just here .
Furthermore , many Koreans only pursue a stable life, even young generation without any challenge.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Ms. [이름]!
Yes, if there are opportunities for them to expand their horizon, they should not hesitate to do it or will regret it later in life.
Have a great day!
Aki~
I want to recommend to young generation that you go to abroad to work or study.
>>> I want to recommend that the young generation go abroad to work or study.
Because our lifespan will get longer, we had better to try as many thing as possible.
>>> Because our lifespan will get longer, we had better try as many things as possible.
Korea is geographically isolated from other countries.
>>> CORRECT!
So we don\'t have a trial and will, it is easy that we stay just here .
>>> So we don\'t have a trial and will, it is easy for us to stay just here.
Furthermore , many Koreans only pursue a stable life, even young generation without any challenge.
>>> Furthermore, many Koreans only pursue a stable life, even the young generation, without any challenge.
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