Zero Waste

2021-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on the zero waste lifestyle? I think it\'s meaningful activity. We can decrease wastes and we can slow golbal warming. And we can practice minimalism and decrease micro plastic. But there is one problem. Zero-Waste products are expensive more than normal! I think Zero-Waste shops should decrease the price. Then, many people can practice zero waste more popular!

강사 첨삭

Here\'s your last edited composition this week, [이름]!
Catch you on Monday and a safe weekend to you!

Cheers,
Jean~~
                              Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on the zero waste lifestyle?


I think it\'s meaningful activity.
>> I believe it\'s a meaningful activity.

We can decrease wastes and we can slow golbal warming.
>> We can reduce waste and slow down global warming.

And we can practice minimalism and decrease micro plastic.
>> Also, we can practice minimalism and decrease microplastics.

But there is one problem.
>> correct~~

Zero-Waste products are expensive more than normal!
>> Zero-Waste products are more expensive than normal or ordinary ones!

I think Zero-Waste shops should decrease the price.
>> I think we need more Zero-Waste shops and they should reduce or lower their prices.

Then, many people can practice zero waste more popular!
>> Then, many people can practice zero waste and it\'ll become more popular!

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