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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. What is your own opinion? I prefer to live in a house than apartment. There are many advantages to living in a house. First, people lived in a house don't need to pay thier maintenance fees. If i live in an apartment ,i have to pay my maintenance fee. The more economic condition is shaky, the more i have to pay a maintenance fee. it may be a personel burden. Secondly, living a house is more safe than living an apartment. Because there are a lot of people lived togther in an apartment, if one person make a safety accident such as fire, every people lived in an apartment will be in danger. finally, Because house has a yard, people can take a rest and raise flowers in a yard. So i prefer to live in a house.

Hello [이름]!   You are truly diligent. You did a lot of homework today. Some reminders: 1. Check your spelling. 2. Capitalize the first letter of your sentence and \'I\'. 3. We use a reduced clause in each part of a The more…, the … expression. The correlative comparative is a paired construction. Each part is syntactically alike. A comma separates the two clauses. examples: The more the building shook, the more we held on. The more the wave rose, the faster we ran. The more we saw, the less we could believe. The more we looked, the fewer things we found to retrieve.     Teacher Venus^^   Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. What is your own opinion? >>>CORRECTI prefer to live in a house than apartment. >>>I prefer to live in a house than in an apartment.   There are many advantages to living in a house. >>>CORRECT   First, people lived in a house don\'t need to pay thier maintenance fees. >>>First, people living in a house don\'t need to pay their maintenance fees. If i live in an apartment ,i have to pay my maintenance fee. >>>If I live in an apartment ,i have to pay my maintenance fees.   The more economic condition is shaky, the more i have to pay a maintenance fee. >>>The more shaky the economic condition is, the more maintenance fees I have to pay. it may be a personel burden. >>>It may be a personal burden.   Secondly, living a house is more safe than living an apartment. >>>Secondly, living in a house is more safe than living in an apartment.   Because there are a lot of people lived togther in an apartment, if one person make a safety accident such as fire, every people lived in an apartment will be in danger. >>>Because there are a lot of people living together in an apartment, it might be dangerous.   if one person make a safety accident such as fire, every people lived in an apartment will be in danger. >>>If one person makes an accident such as fire, every people living in that apartment will be in danger.   finally, Because house has a yard, people can take a rest and raise flowers in a yard. >>>Finally, because a house has a yard, people can take a rest and raise flowers in the yard.    So i prefer to live in a house. >>>So I prefer to live in a house.