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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!!!
Happy Wednesday! It seems like you are very religious and it makes me feel guilty because I'm always busy and can't find time to go to church.
Well anyway, you made a very nice composition. Good job and keep it up!
The famous preacher Jung Byeong Wook said that we Christians should seek after for the relationship with Jesus Christ than anything else.
>>>correct^^
I do agree to this idea.
>>>I do agree with this idea (statement).
Yesterday I was much impressed by a sermon over the air about Joseph.
>>>Yesterday, I was very (much) impressed with a sermon about Joseph on air.
We are apt to respect him only as a successful man though; it’s a big mistake and we should not overlook his personal integrity which had been forged through his turbulences.
>>>correct
Traditionally most Korean people believe the theory of Feng Shui.
>>>correct
Accordingly they believe that if they have buried their ancestor in a good site, the family will thrive and be prosperous.
>>>Accordingly, they believe that their family will thrive or become prosperous if they burry their ancestors in a good site.
Therefore the specialists of Feng Shui are sought after for the best location for the tomb as well as building.
>>>Therefore, the specialists of Feng Shui sought after the best location for the tombs and buildings.
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