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How can your hobbies be helpful to your teaching job?
I have two habbies.
First is walking with my dog. And second is listening to a music.
After I walk with my dog, I feel happy and improve my physical ability.
So, I can express good feeling to my students.
And listening to a music makes me relax.
So, even if I meet a bad situation in the school, I will treat it positively.
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I like your relaxing hobbies, too, Ku [이름]! I hope they can always give you calmness.-Faith-
How can your hobbies be helpful to your teaching job?>> CORRECT
I have two habbies.
>> I have two hobbies.
First is walking with my dog.
First is walking with my dog.
>> CORRECT
OR First, I walk my dog.
And second is listening to a music.
>> Second is listening to music.
After I walk with my dog, I feel happy and improve my physical ability.
After I walk with my dog, I feel happy and improve my physical ability.
>> After I walk with my dog, I feel happy and I feel I improve my physical ability.
So, I can express good feeling to my students.
So, I can express good feeling to my students.
>> Therefore, I can express my good feelings to my students.
And listening to a music makes me relax.
And listening to a music makes me relax.
>> Moreover, listening to music makes me relaxed.
So, even if I meet a bad situation in the school, I will treat it positively.
So, even if I meet a bad situation in the school, I will treat it positively.
>> Thus, even if I experience a bad situation at school, I will treat it positively.
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