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How important is having a hobby as a teacher?
Having a hobby as a teacher is very important.
Because teachers have to get a method to relive their stress.
If they have a stress in every time, they will be more aggressive and treat students violently.
So, they have to get a hobby for happy life.
It is very helpful to relive stress like swimming, walking, etc.
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I could not agree more with you, Ku [이름]! No matter how busy we are, we need to look after ourselves. On the other hand, in a formal writing, it will be better not to use \'etc.\' because it is just commonly use in speaking.-Faith-
How important is having a hobby as a teacher?>> CORRECT
Having a hobby as a teacher is very important. Because teachers have to get a method to relive their stress.
>> Having a hobby as a teacher is very important because teachers have to get a method to relieve their stress.
If they have a stress in every time, they will be more aggressive and treat students violently.
If they have a stress in every time, they will be more aggressive and treat students violently.
>> If they have stress all the time, they will be more aggressive and treat students violently.
So, they have to get a hobby for happy life.
So, they have to get a hobby for happy life.
>> Therefore, they have to get a hobby for a happy life.
It is very helpful to relive stress like swimming, walking, etc.
It is very helpful to relive stress like swimming, walking, etc.
>> It is very helpful to relieve stress by going swimming and walking.
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