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I think it's better for students to have a long summer or winter vacation. Yong students can have various experiences like trip to abroad or domestic in long vacation. I think that various experiences in the childhood greatly affect to formation of their personality. However, sometimes long breaks are bad to some student. There are some unfortunate children in our country. They have no meals if they doesn't go to the school. As a result, Although students have a long break, law for fortunate children should be established.

Hello [이름]! This is exactly why I love reading your compositions! You always give such practical and well-thought-out answers. You expressed yourself well here. You didn\'t just think about the normal children, you took into consideration those who are less fortunate. This is remarkable! Great job! Keep up the good work. :) Please review my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ I think it\'s better for students to have a long summer or winter vacation. >> CORRECT!Yong students can have various experiences like trip to abroad or domestic in long vacation.>> Young students can have various experiences like a local or international trip during a long vacation. I think that various experiences in the childhood greatly affect to formation of their personality.>> I think that various experiences during childhood can greatly affect their personality. However, sometimes long breaks are bad to some student.>> However, sometimes long breaks are bad for some students. There are some unfortunate children in our country.>> There are some less fortunate children in our country. They have no meals if they doesn\'t go to the school.>> They have no meals if they don\'t go to school. OR >> They won\'t have meals if they don\'t go to school. As a result, Although students have a long break, law for fortunate children should be established. >> In conclusion, if students are going to have a long break, there should be a law regarding the less fortunate children.