[[이름]_essay]Do you think a country would survive without a Government?

2014-08-27 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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It's really difficult question. Actually, I don't think we can survive without a government. Government are consist of law, rule and many position as well as many politicians. There are so many different position in the country. I think that balance is important for the different position and law. Government should effort to maintain this balance for people.

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Hi [이름]!^^ Do you think it\'s a difficult question? I\'m sorry but I think that you managed a great answer!^^ I do think that a Government is very important for a nation because we need leaders. The law is something that we must follow but it must be the officials in the Government who should be our role models. Thank you for your answer!^^ Keep it up! Take care^^ T.Debby Here are my corrections for you today: It\'s really difficult question. >> It\'s a really difficult question. Actually, I don\'t think we can survive without a government. >> CORRECT OR> Actually, I don\'t think we can manage without a government. Government are consist of law, rule and many position as well as many politicians. >> The Government consists of laws, rules and many positions as well as many politicians. There are so many different position in the country. >> There are so many different positions in the country. I think that balance is important for the different position and law. >> CORRECT OR> I think that balance is a must for the different positions and laws. Government should effort to maintain this balance for people. >> The Government should make an effort to maintain this balance for the people.

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