[[이름] essay]Imagine that a big new department store is being built in your hometown. Do you suppor

I think this is a very difficult question. My hometown look like a little country. Department store is very popular for the people in Korea. There are shopping shops, theater, food court and large mart in there. So, That is really convenient for us. However, small shops around department store have a damage for profit. Actually, Department stores are usually managed by large enterprise. This is very important problem for national economy. As a result, I think that conventional market is better than department store in my hometown.

Hi [이름]! I\'ve heard about that issue in Korea before. I think some big malls are closed on Sundays to give chance to traditional markets and small stores. I\'m not certain about the facts. ^^ Thanks for sharing this. You did a great job here, you just need to take note of the proper capitalization and the use of articles in your sentences.   Please review my corrections below.   Ciao!   ~Teacher Marie~   I think this is a very difficult question.>> CORRECT! My hometown look like a little country.>> CORRECT! >> look - looks Department store is very popular for the people in Korea.>> Department stores are very popular among Koreans.   There are shopping shops, theater, food court and large mart in there.>> There are many shops, a theater, a food court and a large supermarket in there. So, That is really convenient for us.>> CORRECT! >> That - that (capitalization) However, small shops around department store have a damage for profit.>> However, the small shops\', around the department store, profits are affected. OR >> However, the small shops around the department store would suffer a decrease in their profit. Actually, Department stores are usually managed by large enterprise.>> CORRECT! >> Department - department (capitalization) This is very important problem for national economy.>> GOOD!OR >> This is a very important issue in our nation\'s economy. As a result, I think that conventional market is better than department store in my hometown. >> CORRECT! OR >> I think that it\'s better to have a conventional market than a department store in my hometown.