[[이름] essay]Should employers set aside time during the day for their employees to exercise?

2015-01-30 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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I think employers should employers set aside time for their employees to exercise. Sometimes, employees feel lazy because employees are sitting down in fixed chair for a long time. So, they need a rest time with some exercise. Moreover, exercise can affect to their morale. This is better to enhance efficiency of work.

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Hi [이름]! As an employee, I have to agree with what you said here. It makes me feel lethargic if I just sit in my desk for nine hours straight. That\'s why I try to do some stretching every now and then. I also stand up for about 10 to 20 minutes if I\'m not doing anything. Thanks for trying your best to answer your homework. Please check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ I think employers should employers set aside time for their employees to exercise. >> I think employers should set aside some time for their employees to exercise.Sometimes, employees feel lazy because employees are sitting down in fixed chair for a long time. >> Sometimes, employees feel lazy because they remain seated in the same chair for a long time. So, they need a rest time with some exercise. >> So they need a break and some exercise. Moreover, exercise can affect to their morale. >> Moreover, exercise can affect their morale. This is better to enhance efficiency of work. >> This would better enhance their efficiency at work.

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