[[이름] essay]Should employers set aside time during the day for their employees to exercise?
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I think employers should employers set aside time for their employees to exercise.
Sometimes, employees feel lazy because employees are sitting down in fixed chair for a long time.
So, they need a rest time with some exercise.
Moreover, exercise can affect to their morale.
This is better to enhance efficiency of work.
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Hi [이름]! As an employee, I have to agree with what you said here. It makes me feel lethargic if I just sit in my desk for nine hours straight. That\'s why I try to do some stretching every now and then. I also stand up for about 10 to 20 minutes if I\'m not doing anything.
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I think employers should employers set aside time for their employees to exercise.
>> I think employers should set aside some time for their employees to exercise.Sometimes, employees feel lazy because employees are sitting down in fixed chair for a long time.
>> Sometimes, employees feel lazy because they remain seated in the same chair for a long time.
So, they need a rest time with some exercise.
>> So they need a break and some exercise.
Moreover, exercise can affect to their morale.
>> Moreover, exercise can affect their morale.
This is better to enhance efficiency of work.
>> This would better enhance their efficiency at work.
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