[[이름]_essay]What advantages does Korea have from all the other countries in the world?
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This is frankly a difficult question.
Korea have not a lot of resource and territory is smaller than other countries.
However, korean very well know we can sucess with our sedulity in the world.
I heard that korean in the other countries is more diligent.
In korea, salesman leave the office too late.
korean know that is not good culture.
So, korean have a serious competition in the society.
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Hi there [이름]!^^
Despite having a difficult question, you have managed a great answer!^^
Koreans are known to be hard-working individuals. That I think is a good
impression to earn the trust of other people when it comes to career.
Have a great day!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
This is frankly a difficult question.
>> CORRECT
Or> This is a challenging question.Korea have not a lot of resource and territory is smaller than other countries.
>> Korea doesn\'t have a lot of resources and the territory is smaller than other countries.
However, korean very well know we can sucess with our sedulity in the world.
>> However, Koreans are very well know we can be sucessful with our security in the world.I heard that korean in the other countries is more diligent.
>> I heard that a Korean in the other countries is more diligent.In korea, salesman leave the office too late.
>> In Korea, salesmen leave the office too late.korean know that is not good culture.
>> Koreans know that it is not a good culture.
So, korean have a serious competition in the society.
>> So, Koreans have a serious competition in the society.
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