[[이름]_essay]What annoys you the most when traveling to another place?
학생이 쓴 원문
Actually, What annoy me the most in another place for travelling is cell phone.
This is interasting answer I think.
Cell phone is really convenient and useful tool.
However, often I lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often.
Moreover, nowadays I take a picture in my phone too much.
I see the news many people have a syndrome for their phone.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!^^
Interesting answer!^^
I have realized that I also have missed a lot of memories because
I focused myself on the mobile phone!^^
Now I know!^^
Thank you [이름].
Have a great day!^^
Take care!^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
Actually, What annoy me the most in another place for travelling is cell phone.
>> Actually, what annoys me the most in another place for travelling is a cellphone.This is interasting answer I think.
>> This is an interesting answer I think.Cell phone is really convenient and useful tool.
>> A cellphone is really convenient and a useful tool.However, often I lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often.
>> However, I often lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often.Moreover, nowadays I take a picture in my phone too much.
>> CORRECT
OR> I take a lot of pictures with my cellphone a lot.I see the news many people have a syndrome for their phone.
>> I saw from the news that many people have this syndrome from their phone.
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