[[이름]_essay]What annoys you the most when traveling to another place?

2014-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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Actually, What annoy me the most in another place for travelling is cell phone. This is interasting answer I think. Cell phone is really convenient and useful tool. However, often I lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often. Moreover, nowadays I take a picture in my phone too much. I see the news many people have a syndrome for their phone.

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Hi there [이름]!^^ Interesting answer!^^ I have realized that I also have missed a lot of memories because I focused myself on the mobile phone!^^ Now I know!^^ Thank you [이름]. Have a great day!^^ Take care!^^ Here are my corrections for you today: Actually, What annoy me the most in another place for travelling is cell phone. >> Actually, what annoys me the most in another place for travelling is a cellphone.This is interasting answer I think. >> This is an interesting answer I think.Cell phone is really convenient and useful tool. >> A cellphone is really convenient and a useful tool.However, often I lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often. >> However, I often lost good memory because I see the display of the phone too often.Moreover, nowadays I take a picture in my phone too much. >> CORRECT OR> I take a lot of pictures with my cellphone a lot.I see the news many people have a syndrome for their phone. >> I saw from the news that many people have this syndrome from their phone.

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