[[이름]_essay]What career in Korea do you think needs to have more improvements?

I think that the English skill is the important factor for the improvements to get a job or promotion. So, even employee are study English in the academy after work. Moreover, They have to submit a their certificate of English test like TOEIC or TOFLE. We can't stop the study of English. This is very important to keep their career but also is under stress. So, There are so many English academy in Korea actually.

Hi there [이름]! The system to study English is also getting better yet it has become a very systematic process. If jobs require it, then it would require people to take advantage of Academies. A business or a company would need people to practice skills since they have a goal to be globally competitive!^^ Have a great day ahead!^^ T.Debby^^ Here are my corrections for you today: I think that the English skill is the important factor for the improvements to get a job or promotion. >> CORRECT OR> An  English skill plays a major role for promotion.So, even employee are study English in the academy after work. >> So, even employees are required to study English in the academy after work.Moreover, They have to submit a their certificate of English test like TOEIC or TOFLE. >> Moreover, they have to submit their certificate of English test slike TOEIC or TOFLE.We can\'t stop the study of English. >> We can\'t stop studying English.This is very important to keep their career but also is under stress. >> This is very important to keep their career but also is it keeps them under stress.So, There are so many English academy in Korea actually. >> So, there are so many English academies in Korea actually.