[[이름]_essay]What do you think should be the traits of a good Politician? Why
학생이 쓴 원문
I do think that good politician is modest person.
Frankly, Politician has a power and a lot of money.
So, so many politicians are arrogant and their authority is abuse to conseal their fault.
However, good politician is always honest.
They make an effort to consider public position.
Above all, They not violate the law.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Politicians should be role models but most of the time we hear
News about them related to breaking the law and corruption.
I also believe that they should be modest and act properly and honestly all the time!^^
Have a great weekend!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
I do think that good politician is modest person.
>> I do think that a good politician is a modest person.Frankly, Politician has a power and a lot of money.
>> Frankly, Politicians have power and a lot of money.So, so many politicians are arrogant and their authority is abuse to conseal their fault.
>> So, many politicians are arrogant and their authority is abused to conceal their faults.However, good politician is always honest.
>> However, a good politician is always honest.They make an effort to consider public position.
>> They make an effort to consider a public position.Above all, They not violate the law.
>> Above all, they do not violate the law.
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