[[이름]_essay]What is something that you would never ever buy?
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I would never ever buy cigarette.
Actually, I don't like smoking.
But, I am respectful to others which they like smoking.
Sometimes, I like to drink a alcohol with my family or friends.
I think cigarette and alcohol give a same effect to the people, relieve a stress and forget a bad things.
However, They give negatively effect to our health.
Therefore, I think that one of them can be allowed to ourselves.
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Hi there [이름]!^^
Thank you for sending me this!^^
I cannot talk to you until next week but then again I hope you get a chance to read this.
Smoking is hazardous! It really is a public health risk. It is good to know
that you are hesitant to try it.
Alcohol is okay as long as it is for social drinking.
It is easlily controlled as compared to smoking!^^
Thank you for this [이름].
Check my corrections for you.
Take care!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
I would never ever buy cigarette.
>> I would never ever buy a cigarette.Actually, I don\'t like smoking.
>> CORRECT
Or> I honestly don\'t like smoking.
But, I am respectful to others which they like smoking.
>> But, I am respectful to others who like smoking.
Sometimes, I like to drink a alcohol with my family or friends.
>> CORRECT
OR> I sometimes have a drink with my family or friends.I think cigarette and alcohol give a same effect to the people, relieve a stress and forget a bad things.
>> I think a cigarette and alcohol give the same effect to the people, like relieve a stress and forget bad things.However, They give negatively effect to our health.
>> However, They give negative effects to our health.Therefore, I think that one of them can be allowed to ourselves.
>> Therefore, I think that one of them can be allowed for ourselves.
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