[[이름]_essay]What Korean product would you like to be internationally promoted? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
Among the korean product, There are selfie bar.
Nowadays, selfie bar is famous between the young people.
If we have a selfie bar, We can take a picture for us with landscapes.
The disadvantage is that our face is filled out the screen of the cell phone, When I take a picture myself.
So, many korean people have a selfie bar thesedays.
Even the professor I know bought the selfie bar for me in korea.
It's really funny and interesting item.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!^^
Thank you for this answer!^^
A selfie bar in Korea is referred to as \"monopod\" by foreigners.
Sometimes it looks awkward but then again it\'s practical for
group pictures!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
Among the korean product, There are selfie bar.
>> Among the korean products, there are selfie bars. Nowadays, selfie bar is famous between the young people.
>> Nowadays, a selfie bar is famous for the young people.If we have a selfie bar, We can take a picture for us with landscapes.
>> If we have a selfie bar, we can take a picture for us with landscapes.The disadvantage is that our face is filled out the screen of the cell phone, When I take a picture myself.
>> The disadvantage is that our faces fill out the screen of the cell phone when I take a picture myself.So, many korean people have a selfie bar thesedays.
>> So, many Koreans have a selfie bar thesedays.
Even the professor I know bought the selfie bar for me in korea.
>> Even the professor I know bought the selfie bar for me in Korea.It\'s really funny and interesting item.
>> It\'s really a funny and an interesting item.
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