[[이름]_essay]What would be something that you think is interesting to collect? Why?

2014-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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A few years ago, I collected some coins that it was produced in 1987. I was born in september 1987. I heard that if I have a coin produced when I was born, It would bring good luck. So, I have about 40 coins. It was a pretty interesting hobby for me. Whenever I receive some coins in supermarket or mart, I confirmed it's produced year.

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Hi there [이름]!^^ That was interesting information!^^ I was born 1988 and I never saw a coin produced the same year. I will try to look for one.^^ Thank you!^^ T.Debby^^ Here are my corrections for you today: A few years ago, I collected some coins that it was produced in 1987. >>A few years ago, I collected some coins that it were produced in 1987. I was born in september 1987. >> CORRECT OR> 1987 was the year i was born.I heard that if I have a coin produced when I was born, It would bring good luck.>> CORRECT OR> It would be lucky to own a coin that was produced on the same year that I was born. So, I have about 40 coins. >> CORRECT OR> I own about 40 coins.It was a pretty interesting hobby for me. >> CORRECT OR> It was an interesting hobby for me.Whenever I receive some coins in supermarket or mart, I confirmed it\'s produced year. >> Whenever I receive some coins in supermarket or mart, I confirmed it\'s production year.

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