[[이름]_essay]What would you do if you won 1 million dollars from the lottery?
학생이 쓴 원문
It's a happy dream.
If I won 1 million dollars from the lottery like lotto, immadiately I will buy the apartment for our family.
However, I don't want a car because I don't need a car yet.
And then, I will deposit all money remaining.
I saw that many people get a lot of money from lottery lost that money easily.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!^^
It is a happy thought to have a lot of money but to think about what to do with
the money is also a different matter.
It\'s great that you think about your families needs.
Thank you for yout answers!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
It\'s a happy dream.
>> CORRECT
OR> It\'s a nice thought.If I won 1 million dollars from the lottery like lotto, immadiately I will buy the apartment for our family.>> If I won 1 million dollars from the lottery, I will immediately buy the apartment for our family.
However, I don\'t want a car because I don\'t need a car yet.
>> CORRECT
OR> I would not however buy a car since I do not need one.And then, I will deposit all money remaining.
>> And then, I would deposit all the remaining money.
I saw that many people get a lot of money from lottery lost that money easily.
>> I saw that many people get a lot of money from the lottery lost that money easily.
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