[[이름]_essay]Would you rather have a boring but well paying job or do something you love and get pa
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This is really difficult question becaue I am sure that if I want a job very well with my interest, money is come to me with my passion.
In korea, there is a following proverb "sometimes money is in there, but sometimes money is not in mine".
Therefore, I think that we should not head for money specially in own job.
If I work hard with passion and pleasure, finally money is coming to me after a few times later.
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Hi there [이름]!^^
Some people find motivation to work with the money but then we must
be very wise in controlling how we ean money. If we can manage to do things
at a time like passion and money, we would all be working hard and happy.
Have a great weekend!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
This is really difficult question becaue I am sure that if I want a job very well with my interest, money is come to me with my passion.
>> This is a really difficult question because I am sure that if I want a job suited well with my interest, money would come to me with my passion.In korea, there is a following proverb \"sometimes money is in there, but sometimes money is not in mine\".
>> In Korea, there is a proverb \"sometimes money is there, but sometimes money is not mine\".Therefore, I think that we should not head for money specially in own job.
>> Therefore, I think that we should not head for money specially in our own job.If I work hard with passion and pleasure, finally money is coming to me after a few times later.
>> If I work hard with passion and pleasure, money would finally come to me after a few times later.
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