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2015-03-27 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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If I can live in anywhere I want for one year, I hope to live in Italy or France. I have been trip to several nation of the Europe. Among them, France and Italy was really beautiful to me. I want to go there again. Landscape and culture of Europe is different with our contury. Some people think the nations are romantic place. Expecially, I want to go venice again with my fiance. I think that most beautiful city is there. All buildings are floating in the ocean, and bridges are connected with two buildings. However, I think if I can get a chance, I have to forcibly live in America due to English.

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Hello [이름]! We totally have the same dream destination! European countries are so sophisticated and posh! I would love to live in Italy too. But I would probably live in Rome, not Venice. :) Thanks for sharing here. I hope you could go back to Venice with your fiance soon. Please check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ If I can live in anywhere I want for one year, I hope to live in Italy or France. >> If I can live anywhere I want for one year, I hope to live in Italy or France. I have been trip to several nation of the Europe. >> I have been to several European countries before. OR >> I went on a trip to several European countries before. Among them, France and Italy was really beautiful to me. >> Among them, the most beautiful countries for me were France and Italy. I want to go there again. >> CORRECT!Landscape and culture of Europe is different with our contury. >> The landscape and culture of Europe are different with our country. Some people think the nations are romantic place. >> Some people think that Europe is full of romantic places. Expecially, I want to go venice again with my fiance. >> I especially want to go to Venice again with my fiance. I think that most beautiful city is there. >> I think that is the most beautiful city in the world. All buildings are floating in the ocean, and bridges are connected with two buildings. >> All the houses are floating in the river and they are connected by bridges. However, I think if I can get a chance, I have to forcibly live in America due to English. >> However, I think that if I get this chance, I will be forced to live in America because I have to learn English.      

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