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I want to play a skydiving from a helicopter.
One year ago, I enjoyed a paragliding in the turkey.
It was amazing and beautiful experience for me.
I could fly in the sky and I could see the beach and mountain in the upper side.
The paragliding not had rapid velocity, so I didn't afraid it.
However, skydiving is so fast, and It will be start at the high altitude.
So, I'm afraid it.
I've been never bungee jumping.
Maybe I will never play a skydiving, but I wonder that a little bit.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Wow! You\'ve gone paragliding before? And in Turkey??? That\'s incredible! I\'ve always wanted to try paragliding or parasailing! I\'m not sure about skydiving, though. I feel like I\'m going to faint just by thinking about it. Haha! You should give it a try with your fiance! :)
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
I want to play a skydiving from a helicopter.
>> I want to try skydiving from a helicopter.
One year ago, I enjoyed a paragliding in the turkey.
>> One year ago, I enjoyed paragliding in Turkey.It was an amazing and beautiful experience for me.
>> CORRECT! I could fly in the sky and I could see the beach and mountain in the upper side.
>> I could fly in the sky and I had a view of the beach and the mountain from the top.
The paragliding not had rapid velocity, so I didn\'t afraid it.
>> Paragliding did not involve high velocity so I wasn\'t afraid of it.However, skydiving is so fast, and It will be start at the high altitude.
>> However, skydiving is so fast and it will start at a high altitude.
So, I\'m afraid it.
>> So I\'m afraid of doing it.I\'ve been never bungee jumping.
>> I\'ve never gone bungee jumping.Maybe I will never play a skydiving, but I wonder that a little bit.
>> Maybe I will never go skydiving, but I\'m wondering a little bit about that.
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